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Mingli: /* 典雅的翻译 */

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‎典雅的翻译

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 |Then it seemed to me that the Sierra should be called, not the Nevada or Snowy Range, but the Range of Light.
-|然后，我觉得应该把这条塞拉山脉叫做光明山脉，而不是内华达山脉或者雪域山脉。
+|因此，我觉得应该把这条塞拉山脉叫做光明山脉，而不是内华达山脉或者雪域山脉。
 |-
 |And after ten years of wandering and wondering in the heart of it, rejoicing in its glorious floods of light, the white beams of the morning streaming through the passes, the noonday radiance on the crystal rocks, the flush of the alpenglow, and the irised spray of countless waterfalls, it still seems above all others the Range of Light.
 |十年来，我一直在山谷的中心游荡来去，在它光明的洪流中欢欣鼓舞，清晨的白光穿过山口，正午的光辉照耀在水晶岩石上，朝霞的涌动，无数瀑布的喷射，这光明的山脉似乎仍然睥睨于其他。
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 |Then it seemed to me that the Sierra should be called, not the Nevada or Snowy Range, but the Range of Light.
-|然后，我觉得应该把这条谢拉山脉叫做光明山脉，而不是内华达山脉或者雪域山脉。
+|然后，我觉得应该把这条塞拉山脉叫做光明山脉，而不是内华达山脉或者雪域山脉。
 |-
 |And after ten years of wandering and wondering in the heart of it, rejoicing in its glorious floods of light, the white beams of the morning streaming through the passes, the noonday radiance on the crystal rocks, the flush of the alpenglow, and the irised spray of countless waterfalls, it still seems above all others the Range of Light.
 |十年来，我一直在山谷的中心游荡来去，在它光明的洪流中欢欣鼓舞，清晨的白光穿过山口，正午的光辉照耀在水晶岩石上，朝霞的涌动，无数瀑布的喷射，这光明的山脉似乎仍然睥睨于其他。
 |}

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 |它等待我出生，然后又等待我活到最狂妄的年龄上忽地残废了双腿。四百多年里，它一面剥蚀了古殿檐头浮夸的琉璃，淡褪了门壁上炫耀的朱红，坍记了一段段高墙又散落了玉砌雕栏，祭坛四周的老柏树愈见苍幽，到处的野草荒藤也都茂盛得自在坦荡。
-|It waited for me to be born, and then it waited for me to reach the age when I was at my most arrogant and suddenly crippled my legs. For more than 400 years, it has eroded the flamboyant colored glass on the eaves of the ancient temple, faded the vermilion showing off on the walls of the gate; it collapsed sections of the high walls and scattered the jade balustrades also. The old Cypress trees around the altar are growing paler and paler, and wild grasses and vines grow freely everywhere.
+|It waited for me to be born, and then it waited for me to reach the age when I was at my most arrogant and suddenly crippled my legs. For more than 400 years, it has eroded the flamboyant colored glass on the eaves of the ancient temple, faded the vermilion showing off on the walls of the gate; it has collapsed sections of the high walls and scattered the jade balustrades also. The old Cypress trees around the altar are growing paler and paler, and wild grasses and vines grow freely everywhere.
 |-
 |这时候想必我是该来了。十五年前的一个下午，我摇着轮椅进入园中，它为一个失魂落魄的人把一切都准备好了。那时，太阳循着亘古不变的路途正越来越大，也越红。在满园弥漫的沉静光芒中，一个人更容易看到时间，并看见自己的身影。

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 |它等待我出生，然后又等待我活到最狂妄的年龄上忽地残废了双腿。四百多年里，它一面剥蚀了古殿檐头浮夸的琉璃，淡褪了门壁上炫耀的朱红，坍记了一段段高墙又散落了玉砌雕栏，祭坛四周的老柏树愈见苍幽，到处的野草荒藤也都茂盛得自在坦荡。
-|It waited for me to be born, and then it waited for me to reach the age when I was at my most arrogant and suddenly crippled my legs. For more than 400 years, it has eroded the flamboyant colored glass on the eaves of the ancient temple, faded the vermilion showing off on the walls of the gate. Also, it collapsed sections of the high walls and scattered the jade balustrades. The old Cypress trees around the altar are growing paler and paler, and wild grasses and vines grow freely everywhere.
+|It waited for me to be born, and then it waited for me to reach the age when I was at my most arrogant and suddenly crippled my legs. For more than 400 years, it has eroded the flamboyant colored glass on the eaves of the ancient temple, faded the vermilion showing off on the walls of the gate; it collapsed sections of the high walls and scattered the jade balustrades also. The old Cypress trees around the altar are growing paler and paler, and wild grasses and vines grow freely everywhere.
 |-
 |这时候想必我是该来了。十五年前的一个下午，我摇着轮椅进入园中，它为一个失魂落魄的人把一切都准备好了。那时，太阳循着亘古不变的路途正越来越大，也越红。在满园弥漫的沉静光芒中，一个人更容易看到时间，并看见自己的身影。

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 |And after ten years of wandering and wondering in the heart of it, rejoicing in its glorious floods of light, the white beams of the morning streaming through the passes, the noonday radiance on the crystal rocks, the flush of the alpenglow, and the irised spray of countless waterfalls, it still seems above all others the Range of Light.
-|十年来，我一直在山谷的中心游荡来去，在它光明的洪流中欢欣，清晨的白光穿过山口，正午的光辉照耀在水晶岩石上，朝霞的涌动，无数瀑布的喷射，这光明的山脉似乎仍然睥睨于其他。
+|十年来，我一直在山谷的中心游荡来去，在它光明的洪流中欢欣鼓舞，清晨的白光穿过山口，正午的光辉照耀在水晶岩石上，朝霞的涌动，无数瀑布的喷射，这光明的山脉似乎仍然睥睨于其他。
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 彩云小译是彩云在自然语言处理上的第一款产品，诞生的前后凝聚了大家的心血，也被寄予了厚望。
 == 附录：翻译举例 ==
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 |十年来，我一直在山谷的中心游荡来去，在它光明的洪流中欢欣，清晨的白光穿过山口，正午的光辉照耀在水晶岩石上，朝霞的涌动，无数瀑布的喷射，这光明的山脉似乎仍然睥睨于其他。
 |}

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 彩云小译是彩云在自然语言处理上的第一款产品，诞生的前后凝聚了大家的心血，也被寄予了厚望。
-== 翻译举例 ==
+== 附录：翻译举例 ==
 在小译翻译的基础上，稍加打磨，即可成为美篇。
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-|+ 约翰·缪尔《约塞米蒂国家公园·光明山脉》开篇英译中对照
+|+ 约翰·缪尔《约塞米蒂国家公园·光明山脉》片段英译中对照
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 ! style="width: 50%;" | 中文